Tuesday, February 2, 2010
Spark
"I wish you would fall in love with me, so that we could run away together", he sang to the woman 20 years his senior. "I'd just assume join the army", she shot back, crushing the bows, arrows, and ego of the retired school teacher -- wannabe cupid. In 86 years, she'd lost her parents, her husband, a grandchild, and all but one member of her card club. But she never lost her spark.
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I really like this piece. The person who is being described, the female character, is very interesting. I love the detail about her card club. The last line is especially effective. It gives the piece a nice feeling of closure, and adds to her character. I'm still interested in the suitor character. Part of me wants to know more about him. But part of me sees that he is not the important figure in this piece. I also like the ages of the characters. It's not what I always see in poetry, and is a nice change of pace.
ReplyDeleteThis is seems very powerful to me. It is so quick but effective. With one comment you get the feeling that the love/hope/dreams of this young man have been crushed. I get a real feeling for this woman, her sense of loss, but fiestiness that has helped her to get by. There is so much more I want to know. I want to know more of him and definitely more about her, but I'm afraid to ask because I don't want her to snap at me.
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